Re: animatics - launch control dialog feedback

This is great!
thanks again.
-j

RogerArno@comcast.net wrote:

Jeroen, Ken,  I agree with Ken's comments, but would still quibble about the last phrasing.  I think it would be better to say something like, "according to our measurements of your trajectory, your capsule will...."  Roger  -------------- Original message ---------------------- From: Jeroen Lapre <jeroen@ilm.com>   

Hi Ken,  much thanks. We will make these corrections when we use the real voice  actors. This kind of feedback is invaluable.  If you can think of any background chatter for the approach to the lunar  base, that would be wonderful. i.e. if you were listening in on 1/2 dozen routine base procedures. And/or background chatter for the flight preparations of a freight capsule. e.g. checking with L1 for the all clear, etc.  thanks again -jeroen  Ken Galal wrote:     

Hi Jeroen,  Roger asked me to take a look at the clip you referenced in your email  below, and there were a couple of things in the dialogue that seemed a  little off.  Here are some suggestions for you to consider:  1.  Ground control indicates to Cliff that his capsule is "1000  kilometers too slow."  That should be "1000 kilometers per second too  slow." 2.  Ground control also indicates to Cliff, "... at the rate your  capsule is loosing altitude, you will orbit the moon once ..."  This  doesn't sound quite right, since at this point in time, the capsule is  gaining altitude.  Suggest you instead say, "... at the rate your  capsule is decelerating, you will ..."  Ken G.   At 06:21 PM 4/26/2007, you wrote:       

Dear Maelstrom II Cast, Crew, Consultants, and Friends,  I am pleased to inform you that I have been invited to give a  work-in-progress presentation of my Arthur C. Clarke Maelstrom II ILM  Inde project:  http://www.distant-galaxy.com/maelstrom2/MaelstromII.html  at the 1st public NASA Colab San Francisco meeting next Wednesday,  May 2nd:  http://colab.arc.nasa.gov/node/34  Here is one of the animatics that I'll be showing:  (Usual disclaimers: work in progress, temp audio, etc)  http://www.distant-galaxy.com/maelstrom2/edit/M2VanKesselSeq.Apr19.web.mov    This movie file has sound, so make sure you have volume turned up /  headphones, etc.  Wish me luck.  Jon Varner is working on building the space suit Maya creature rig,  one of the last remaining technical R&D tasks!  Getting there.  Cheers!  -jeroen