Re: animatics - launch control dialog feedback

Jeroen, Ken,

I agree with Ken's comments, but would still quibble about the last phrasing. I think it would be better to say something like, "according to our measurements of your trajectory, your capsule will...."

Roger
-------------- Original message ----------------------
From: Jeroen Lapre <jeroen@ilm.com>
> Hi Ken,
>
> much thanks. We will make these corrections when we use the real voice
> actors.
> This kind of feedback is invaluable.
>
> If you can think of any background chatter for the approach to the lunar
> base, that would be wonderful.
> i.e. if you were listening in on 1/2 dozen routine base procedures.
> And/or background chatter for the flight preparations of a freight capsule.
> e.g. checking with L1 for the all clear, etc.
>
> thanks again
> -jeroen
>
> Ken Galal wrote:
> > Hi Jeroen,
> >
> > Roger asked me to take a look at the clip you referenced in your email
> > below, and there were a couple of things in the dialogue that seemed a
> > little off. Here are some suggestions for you to consider:
> >
> > 1. Ground control indicates to Cliff that his capsule is "1000
> > kilometers too slow." That should be "1000 kilometers per second too
> > slow."
> > 2. Ground control also indicates to Cliff, "... at the rate your
> > capsule is loosing altitude, you will orbit the moon once ..." This
> > doesn't sound quite right, since at this point in time, the capsule is
> > gaining altitude. Suggest you instead say, "... at the rate your
> > capsule is decelerating, you will ..."
> >
> > Ken G.
> >
> >
> > At 06:21 PM 4/26/2007, you wrote:
> >> Dear Maelstrom II Cast, Crew, Consultants, and Friends,
> >>
> >> I am pleased to inform you that I have been invited to give a
> >> work-in-progress presentation of my Arthur C. Clarke Maelstrom II ILM
> >> Inde project:
> >>
> >> http://www.distant-galaxy.com/maelstrom2/MaelstromII.html
> >>
> >> at the 1st public NASA Colab San Francisco meeting next Wednesday,
> >> May 2nd:
> >>
> >> http://colab.arc.nasa.gov/node/34
> >>
> >> Here is one of the animatics that I'll be showing:
> >>
> >> (Usual disclaimers: work in progress, temp audio, etc)
> >>
> >> http://www.distant-galaxy.com/maelstrom2/edit/M2VanKesselSeq.Apr19.web.mov

> >>
> >>
> >> This movie file has sound, so make sure you have volume turned up /
> >> headphones, etc.
> >>
> >> Wish me luck.
> >>
> >> Jon Varner is working on building the space suit Maya creature rig,
> >> one of the last remaining technical R&D tasks!
> >>
> >> Getting there.
> >>
> >> Cheers!
> >>
> >> -jeroen
> >
> >
> >
>