Re: animatics - launch control dialog feedback

Hi Ken,

much thanks. We will make these corrections when we use the real voice
actors.
This kind of feedback is invaluable.

If you can think of any background chatter for the approach to the lunar
base, that would be wonderful.
i.e. if you were listening in on 1/2 dozen routine base procedures.
And/or background chatter for the flight preparations of a freight capsule.
e.g. checking with L1 for the all clear, etc.

thanks again
-jeroen

Ken Galal wrote:
> Hi Jeroen,
>
> Roger asked me to take a look at the clip you referenced in your email
> below, and there were a couple of things in the dialogue that seemed a
> little off. Here are some suggestions for you to consider:
>
> 1. Ground control indicates to Cliff that his capsule is "1000
> kilometers too slow." That should be "1000 kilometers per second too
> slow."
> 2. Ground control also indicates to Cliff, "... at the rate your
> capsule is loosing altitude, you will orbit the moon once ..." This
> doesn't sound quite right, since at this point in time, the capsule is
> gaining altitude. Suggest you instead say, "... at the rate your
> capsule is decelerating, you will ..."
>
> Ken G.
>
>
> At 06:21 PM 4/26/2007, you wrote:
>> Dear Maelstrom II Cast, Crew, Consultants, and Friends,
>>
>> I am pleased to inform you that I have been invited to give a
>> work-in-progress presentation of my Arthur C. Clarke Maelstrom II ILM
>> Inde project:
>>
>> http://www.distant-galaxy.com/maelstrom2/MaelstromII.html
>>
>> at the 1st public NASA Colab San Francisco meeting next Wednesday,
>> May 2nd:
>>
>> http://colab.arc.nasa.gov/node/34
>>
>> Here is one of the animatics that I'll be showing:
>>
>> (Usual disclaimers: work in progress, temp audio, etc)
>>
>> http://www.distant-galaxy.com/maelstrom2/edit/M2VanKesselSeq.Apr19.web.mov

>>
>>
>> This movie file has sound, so make sure you have volume turned up /
>> headphones, etc.
>>
>> Wish me luck.
>>
>> Jon Varner is working on building the space suit Maya creature rig,
>> one of the last remaining technical R&D tasks!
>>
>> Getting there.
>>
>> Cheers!
>>
>> -jeroen
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